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    If she calls now
    I am not here
    We had a row
    I had to clear
    out for a bit
    I'm such a twit
    I miss her kiss

    Please do not go
    in your despair
    I hope you know
    this I'll repair
    I will fess up
    to my mess up
    My bad you're sad

    T'was my mistake
    I know that's true
    Caused you heartache
    and made you blue
    Forgive me please
    Down on my knees
    I wait my fate
    Last edited by Muttado1sb; 05-25-2016, 01:15 PM. Reason: Extended version that hit me at work. Damn you MH for putting it into my head so now it just pops! ;-)

  • #2
    Love this. Hope things improve!

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thank you, Sumyanna, but fortunately this is just a poem from my imagination. I hope I don't ever get to this situation.

  • #3
    The worth of poetry is all in making us believe it is true :-) You did well then.

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    • #4
      I think the rhyme scheme you've used with the form takes it to a new level of refinement, Muttado. I am amazed at how you and MHenry are able to do it so fluently.

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      • Muttado1sb
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        Thank you, grant. At some point it may (I hope) stop. For now it flows. (<- Aaand there is another four syllables that will probably become something. Drat.)

    • #5
      Excellence and mastery on FULL VIEW here Muttado1sb. Perfect!

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      • Muttado1sb
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        Thank you, RLW.

    • #6
      The rhyme scheme is putty in your hands, Muttado1sb! And the story is clever with no cat in sight!

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      • Muttado1sb
        Muttado1sb commented
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        Thanks, MH. I try to save the cats for family. However, ''no cats in sight'' will probably get a run.

    • #7
      Another great poem. Format works so well

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      • Muttado1sb
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        Thank you, Parkinsonpoet. It is a fun form from MHenry and grant hayes that works well for me for single stanzas. With this I wanted to see if I could do something longer in it.

    • #8
      Really like this longer poem... i went with you in this poetic story!! thanks Muttado1sb !

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      • Muttado1sb
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        Thank you, Suz-zen!
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