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    Fleeting Youth

    The yesterday's youthful yearnings were carried through life's churning
    And in it's stead stood staring torrential torment flaring
    Like the satin sweltry sadness confounded and surrounded
    Altered and abounded, simply astonished and astounded

    My bitterness was blistered by the desert bruising breezes
    My scaring heart was seizing, sulking solely as it pleases
    And finally stopped from spinning freed from sorrow's selfish sinning
    Smiling smugly from its wishing, while wistful with its winnings

    Debated and delineated and finally deflated
    Compliant and complicit, implicit but not explicit
    reason relegated rightly while queazy and unsightly
    Adjusting and adorning while mentally absorbing

    Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 05-25-2016, 06:33 AM.

  • #2
    "sulking solely as it pleases" what a great line ! Well done my poet friend....

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    • #3
      There are a LOT of great lines in this! This is just my intuition, but this sounds more like a poem by someone in the process of healing - on the angry side - but the good kind of anger - the righteous kind that will allow you to move on. In that sense, it seems like a positive step to me.

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      • AlexandratheLate
        AlexandratheLate commented
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        Thank you very much RLW. -- coming to terms with fleeting youth. :-).

    • #4
      Thank you very much graydon. :-)

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      • #5
        Thank you very much Grant. :-)

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        • #6
          A cornucopia of alliteration, assonance, and consonance, Alexandra! Cascades and forests and mountains of it! One becomes agreeably dizzy with lexical fevers.

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            I'm getting dizzy just reading your beautiful compliment. Thank you Grant. :-)

        • #7
          Wordplay on steroids! An unstoppable train of ...what grant said...! Kudos poetess, AG!

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          • #8
            Thank you very much MH. I appreciate your comments. :-)

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