Ten Count – Knocked Out

[MHenry]

Ten Count – Knocked Out

Round number one
Boxers are set
He knocks him down
But not out yet
Jab to the chin
That did him in
Ten count – knocked out

[MHenry]

Grant, this volta is weak, as it is merely a continuation of the preceding four lines, and the resolution is also weak for the same reason. The subject does not lend itself to the Henrician formula!

[grant hayes]

I suppose it's more an inevitable progress than an about-face. The turn really doth make the poem, with the ha'sonnet, that is.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

How about:

Round number one
Boxers are set
He knocks him down
But not out yet
Jab to the chin
Dentists will grin
Dollars (or fortunes) to count

Or something akin to that?

[graydon archer]

YES! Especially the dental bill.....