Farewell, Farewell!

[Suz-zen]

bidding farewell
distant bagpipes
calling us home
green mountains sigh
castles waiting
children singing
bridges marry
clear coursing streams
calm lakes mirror
birds drift over
breathless beauty
captive stairway
feel safe home here
ancient newness
all those colors
Celtic daydream

[Sumyanna]

Wow. What a beautiful song you have sung. Truly calming to read these lines. Are you Irish? I have Irish blood, but I have never stepped upon her shores. Strange how I can miss a connection to something I have never touched.

[Suz-zen]

Hi Sumyanna thank you!!
I am not Irish, I am a Greek 100%
But I love many who are! And I have dreamed of going since my childhood. Fell in love with Ireland when I saw Ryan's Daughter and am planning a trip in OCT!! Saw a classical musical video this morning and it inspired this poem... it fell from my lips and onto the page.... thank you for reading and commenting!! AND I love Irish poetry!

[Suz-zen]

I cry too!! Let me know which County he is from and maybe i can go by and take a photo??

[pipersfancy]

Sorry for eavesdropping... but my dad was from Co. Antrim, and I still have family there, although—unfortunately—I've not yet been able to make the trip to meet them. Irish poets... and a pint of stout... can there be anything more deliciously melancholy?

[Suz-zen]

Hi Piperfancy~ always welcome to the Irish Party! Pour a Black and tan or Irish Whiskey and let's sing about the trouble we've seen!! County Antrim is on our list along with County Cork as family friends are from these delightful places! Another reason you have this poetic gift...long and lovely heritage of deep emotion!

[grant hayes]

Not to put a damper on your Celtic dreaming, Suz-zen, but the proliferation of sheep grazing in the glen came at great cost to traditional Gaelic culture in the highlands. Look up the Highland Clearances.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Wow Grant - hadn't learned of that before. Thanks for the heads up - I plan to read more on it.

[Suz-zen]

NOOOOOOOOOOO! well, i plan to write a letter to the tourism vid posted on their site!! It looked so heavenly! well it was only a dream, i shall edit accordingly!

[Suz-zen]

a thousand pardons for my ignorance!!

http://www.bbc.co.uk/history/british/civil_war_revolution/scotland_clearances_01.shtml

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Idyllic write.

[Suz-zen]

grant hayes Note edit! I had wanted castles in there originally! Thanks you!!

[MHenry]

Maybe I am miscounting, Suz-zen, but this looks a grantian four-syllabic rave, and a bit 'o the bagpipes for pipersfancy, whose ears moost be ringin' with the delicious melody you have piped!!

[Suz-zen]

MHenry it is!! You are good at math and words! i wondered if you or grant would notice!! i was inspired by his last poem!! And yes pipersfancy was also in my heart with this one!

[pipersfancy]

Aww... I offer my profuse thanks! I haven't been well of late, and your poem put a wistful smile on my face.

[grant hayes]

This flows much better, streamlike, than my effort, Suz-zen! I wonder if we should coin a word for these four-syllable pieces, and maybe add another constraint to them, just to make it a bona fide 'form'. If it isn't already a 'thing', maybe RhymeZoners could pioneer it?

[Suz-zen]

oh what a grand idea!! and thank you for the nice comment!!

[MHenry]

Four syllables is half of eight, so one must do more than split the sonnet line in half. Proposals for further constraints?
What to call such a thing? a Ha'sonnet?

[grant hayes]

Okay, taking further the half sonnet notion, maybe we could make it seven lines? It may need some twist as well.

[Suz-zen]

I like twists

[MHenry]

Yes, it would need a volta and a resolution.

[grant hayes]

Is rhyme obligatory, or optional? And if rhyme, what kind?

[MHenry]

Yes, we must define...I say, optional, like the double Ha'Sonnet. And with seven lines four syllables each, I think we should be liberal on the rhyme scheme.

[grant hayes]

At what point should the volta and resolution fall? Last two lines, respectively?