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  • Never (do) say Never

    You ALWAYS think we stay too long
    When visiting the store
    You SOMETIMES warn we should spend less
    When I like spending more
    You OFTEN leave your clothes around
    When hamper is quite near
    You SELDOM ask from other room
    When I can hardly hear

    We ALWAYS will procrastinate
    When settling long-term goals
    We SOMETIMES harbor mild dislike
    When playing out our roles
    We OFTEN have conflicting plan
    When taking out the trash
    We SELDOM harbor differences
    When allocating cash

    I ALWAYS find last minute tasks
    When you are set to go
    I SOMETIMES pout and pity self
    When you don’t seem to know
    I OFTEN grow quite petulant
    When we are on the outs
    I SELDOM leave a word unsaid
    When I am having doubts

    You see, we’re such a perfect match (I think we’ll last forever)
    As long as we equivocate and NEVER (do) say NEVER

  • #2
    AND it rhymes! This is out of the ball park, Rhymist. It's intricate, it flows, it's relatable, it's witty, it's studded with truths, .... nowhere near enough Likes, nor enough hats to doff!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Grant. Hey yeah...she can still rhyme! Gotta' mix it up a bit. Glad you enjoyed it. Some of it is indeed autobiographical.

    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      I assumed so, Rhymist. It has that real-life flavour to it.

  • #3
    Wonderful the way you used the words and the flow. Totally agree with Grant.

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  • #4
    This was a great way to tell the story of a relationship, RLW! I love it!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks MHenry. There could probably be a lot more verses if I did a thorough review, but this hit the most recent points of interest.

  • #5
    wonderful poem RLW! I love it!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks imrogue. I'm glad it's resonating pleasantly with people.

  • #6
    You and I have trudged the same path to our happy destiny it would seem RLW. A wonderfully written tale of truth

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Graydon. It's good to be in a comfortable place while also looking forward to great new things ahead!

  • #7
    Never leave my side can only be applied. What a clever write RML! You just NEVER know what RML will come up with next.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Haha Bobby...sometimes she doesn't even know herself - until a poem happens!

  • #8
    Oh I do love this - flows beautifully. The ins and outs of love. Never the same - but strangely attracted.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Sumyanna. As I read it over again I'm thinking very likely the wording could change with the times and folks involved in relationship. Yet it certainly fit the bill for the moment!

    • Sumyanna
      Sumyanna commented
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      I don't know - I've been married quite a while and it still fits. We are different, yet somehow together we fill in all the gaps. Never easy - but worth all the work.
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