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  • For the full flower moon, For the blue moon

    On a morning damp and early
    my spirit sweet but surly
    I was woken by a breezy thought
    on the insufficiency of spring.

    ​​​​​​And as my rebel heart lamented
    my cinerary soul repented
    a warming red repentance
    untill the taste of earth just before it blooms
    caught sticky fire in summer's womb,
    and that is how my heart became a peach.

    Enveloped in fermented air
    fragrant and unaware
    all my kisses became one kiss, first kisses, last kisses, the lips between them,
    and my smell became the smell of summer.

    My fuzzy skin was the tenderst topaz and green I had ever seen,
    the baby shadow of my struggle against time.
    My shape was the medusa song that seperates spring's thighs jumps oceans and sings the fruit in summer.
    My flesh was a slow comet
    a hungry softening redening red.

    Untill my tears dripped the first taste of winter
    from infinity's waning crescent
    and my taste was ruined.
    And that is how I became the purple mist that clings to treetops.


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    Last edited by lunar glide; 05-21-2016, 11:47 AM.

  • #2
    Top of the queue! Would love to hear your inspiration for this wonderful write.

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    • lunar glide
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      sorry i just figured out to comment on replies instead of making a new reply.

  • #3
    thanks! inspiration is that spring is ending too soon and i also was thinking of entering a cooking contest for a local peach festival in august and then i got carried away. thanks for the nice comment

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    • #4
      Oh, I do have to say I absolutely love your vision - and the way you wrap the words around them. Truly gorgeous poetry. Beautiful.

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      • #5
        thank you. a great compliment from a poet like yourself

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        • #6
          The language, the flow, the imagery. A ripe peach of a poem

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          • #7
            lol thank you! thats what i hoped to get close to but i never know.

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            • #8
              Luscious verbiage - surly, cinerary (love it), sticky, fermented, fragrant, fuzzy - you certainly found the essence of the peach - and more!

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              • #9
                This is such a surprising perspective, and so winsomely worded, lunar glide. Your phrasing and imagery are a sheer delight. What a spellbinding piece!

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                • lunar glide
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                  thank you for reading

              • #10
                I am delighted you enjoyed it rhyme loving writer. Im surprised to pull it off because im not a natural rhymer.

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                • RhymeLovingWriter
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                  I think we all have some rhyme in us - sometimes it just needs to be encouraged! So I'm encouraging - more, please!

              • #11
                The life of a peach is a noble subject for a poem and this one is wonderful, as it traces the tragic end to this purple peach! Good work, lunar glide!

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                • lunar glide
                  lunar glide commented
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                  thank you 😀

              • #12
                GOOD STUFF!!!! I ate it up!!!!

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                • lunar glide
                  lunar glide commented
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                  lol 😄 thanks!

              • #13
                For the Full Flower Moon, For the Blue Moon is absolutely marvelous, lunar glide! I can't really add to the lavish praise heaped on this wonderful poem already by the excellent poets who already commented, except to say that you have created a most succulent and delicious peach of a poem! Monica P.S. I think you're a fine rhymer, too!

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                • lunar glide
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                  youre too kind 😄 i used to rhyme only once in a blue moon but im going to try more often

              • #14
                lunar glide I stared at the Flower Moon last night and thought of Blue moons and now reading this I am thrilled ! thank you!!

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                • lunar glide
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                  thank you. there was something about it yesterday

              • #15
                Suz-zen, I feel pretty much the way you do about this extraordinary poem.

                And, lunar glide, to me rhyming itself isn't necessarily musicality, which is what this poem is so filled with. I've read poems that rhyme but I don't hear any music. I do hear yours! Monica

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                • lunar glide
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                  thats the best accomplishment i could hope for from letters of the alphabet. and from a real rhymer
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