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    Firm you stand
    As an old Oak tree
    Rooted in your beliefs

    As wise as an eagle
    Who's decisions are as profound as the wind
    The same profundity
    On which are blown
    Your leaves of wisdom
    I eagerly rake

    Progeny of a strange fruit
    I "the blood clot of"

    Stand in rank
    Amongst these mighty Oaks
    In saluted respect

    Earnestly seeking your approval
    Your acceptance
    Your love
    My father
    Your love
    My father
    I love


    Last edited by Odonko-ba; 05-25-2016, 03:59 PM.

  • #2
    Odonko my poet friend, this is perhaps the very best piece of work I've had the extreme pleasure to read in a long, long time! (And I read a lot) You have encapsulated in a few short stanzas, the love and respect a son has for his father, that some couldn't say having written a book. It is a wonderfully warm and loving tribute and I applaud your work tremendously!

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    • #3
      What he said! The accompanying photo enhances the experience. A masterful write Odonko-ba!

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      • #4
        wonderful tribute for your father! I like the part 'your leaves of wisdom I eagerly rake' the best! thanks for sharing!

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        • #5
          Absolutely beautiful!

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          • #6
            Just Lovely - sparse, clean elegant - beautiful flow.

            As wise as an eagle
            Who's decisions are as profound as the wind
            The same profundity
            On which are blown
            Your leaves of wisdom
            I eagerly rake


            OMG, for this paragraph/stanza I stand in awe.

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            • #7
              Men to admire - both father...and son who writes such august tribute.

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              • #8
                What a beautiful way to express such deep love and respect for your father. You are deeply blessed my friend to have a mother and father the way you paint them with such exquisite words.
                Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 05-16-2016, 04:11 PM.

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                • #9
                  Yes, I would affirm and add my praise to all that is said above. The lines that rang out to me were

                  Progeny of a strange fruit
                  I "the blood clot of"


                  The cut-off quotation ending in 'of' opens up a whole world beneath and around the poem. And the fact that it occurs in the middle makes it a sort of pivot for the whole piece. So simply, so boldly, so effectively done. This is really fine work, Odonko-ba. I salute!!!

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                  • #10
                    Powerful piece O-b, with strong and compelling imagery.

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