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  • Mauled

    Saliva drips from the mouth of a savage beast
    his yellow murderous eyes fixated on mine
    my tears of terror had suddenly released
    as he jumped on me, snapped my spine

    With my face pressed into the moist dirt
    my horrid screams seeping within
    piercing nails tear through my shirt
    as the nights moon illuminates my skin

    Jagged teeth sink into my defeated back
    my body motionless from the blood shed
    veins torn out, pressured bones crack
    as ruffled fur stains a slaughtered red

    Arteries and flesh paint the cold ground
    howls echo through the soundless night
    feeling his warm breath as he comes around
    fangs pressed on my pale neck, for one last bite.

    By, Melissa June
    Last edited by MelissaJune; 05-09-2016, 09:41 AM.

  • #2
    A vivid poem language perfectly discriptive an excellent poem

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    • MelissaJune
      MelissaJune commented
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      Thank you very much!

  • #3
    Your subjects certainly go through the wringer, Melissa. I think you are skilled at horror poetics, and it would be great to see you develop this further. It's not something that appears a lot on the Zone.

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    • MelissaJune
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      I'm actually not a horror writer honestly. A sad depressing writer yes. But I did write this trying to make it a horror poem to be in this horror poetry book someone was doing
      Last edited by MelissaJune; 05-09-2016, 09:47 AM.

  • #4
    Line 7 'tare' => 'tear'.

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    • MelissaJune
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      Thank you for catching that! appreciate it

  • #5
    Luscious and delicious, Melissa June.
    I feel a kinship in this poem to my 'Stabbed in Slow Motion,' although I didn't take it to the same level of gore.
    I wussed out, but you didn't!
    Great write. I'm a fan!

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    • MelissaJune
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      I had to make it gruesome to make it a horror enough poem to be in this horror poetry book someone was doing

  • #6
    I like this a lot! Great gory imagery! right to the bone! I feel bad for the subject/victim....you! Very convincing! This is like watching a thrilling movie! great piece!
    Last edited by imrogue; 05-09-2016, 01:53 AM.

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    • MelissaJune
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      Thank you!
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