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  • Mechanical Heart

    Falling droplets of my inner tears
    saturating wheels as they slowly spin
    tinged brown, my hearts rusted gears
    the corroding metal that turns within

    Where minutes pass, can't be saved
    as blood is clotting within my veins
    the dial of dying love is engraved
    onto my heart, where time reins

    Stopping my pulse, as hands stilled
    the vessels of cerise blood drain
    while chambers are vastly filled
    with tear drops of my unwinding pain

    Drowning the bearings, you tore apart
    I murmur loves ticking sound
    sink the key, to my mechanical heart
    to never again be so blindly wound.

    By, Melissa June

  • #2
    Hey MelissaJune, this indeed tells in very nice verse of the dangers of love lost. I like your title and the many words you use to describe the hardening/mechanization of what should, in essence, be the kindest, most supple part of us, our hearts.

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    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Great observation at the end, RLW!

    • MelissaJune
      MelissaJune commented
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      Thank you!

  • #3
    MJ, you have seamlessly blended the description of a broken heart with the broken hands of a timepiece! This is nothing short of brilliant! The rhymes and rhythm are impeccable, and the metaphors superb! Congratulations on a compelling and delicious poem. Bravissimo!

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    • MelissaJune
      MelissaJune commented
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      Thank you! This was writen for something local here.. I lost but it got me writing so I'm Pleased

  • #4
    ^ what Rhymist and MHenry said.

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    • #5
      I agree with RLW....Looking forward to more poems as powerful as this

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      • MelissaJune
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        Thank you!
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