Unraveling

[MelissaJune]

I am torn, mangled thread
shreds entwined, firmly into a ball
tears of rough fiber discolored red
as I am cut, beginning to fall

Extracting the needle from within
bleeding, to unravel all my pain
I untangle, breaking off as I spin
decimated thread, with sorrow's stain

Ravaged strands, fell to be free
my weak twine, now unwound
the knot of darkness once held me
though no longer has me bound

The despair that pained me clears
my heart's released from the sling
threads grew strong, dry of tears
I land, as unbreakable string.

By, Melissa June

[imrogue]

I like the metaphor ball of mangled thread you used

[MelissaJune]

Pleased to hear! Thanks for reading my poem

[grant hayes]

This rhymes and flows so well, Melissa. A passionately dark tone; lines that really sing! It rewards repeated reading. I salute!

[MelissaJune]

Very pleased to read this nice comment and to hear this write flows! Thank you!

[Parkinsonspoet]

The poem flows nicely and I take for Granted that it rewards further reading.

[MelissaJune]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed my poem.

[MHenry]

MJ. you are the master of seamless metaphor, carefully weaving (literally, in this case) them into your poem to enhance and elucidate. You seem to have appropriated this technique as your signature to wonderful effect. I look forward to seeing more of these and learning from you. Thanks for sharing!

[MelissaJune]

I do love using metaphors! Thank you appreciate you taking the time to read my poem.

[DWAYNE]

This poem just sings, eloquently.
Not a wasted syllable. Great!

[MelissaJune]

Thank you

[Katray]

A dark fraying that mends; excellent journey ending on a high note, MelissaJune! I agree with your other commenters about the power of your metaphors; you use them to full advantage but there is no overuse - quite the feat from where I sit..

[MelissaJune]

This poem was writen for something local here the theme was " string " thanks for taking the time to read my work.