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  • Boomerangs - SOFT and HURT

    Here are two Boomerangs for your amusement.
    I learned of them here (with a few beautiful examples by the inventor and author).
    I think this form is suitable for many of the fine poets here in RZ.

    http://redhen.org/boomerangs-in-the-living-room/

    Basically, the first and last word must rhyme and there must be some coming back (I am not sure I did this, or even understand it).

    These are my first attempts, written the day I learned of this new poetic form.


    SOFT)

    Soft lips,
    will you still kiss me
    after I've defiled
    our loft?


    HURT)

    Hurt
    the day you left me
    alone with the scent
    of your shirt
    Last edited by MHenry; 05-04-2016, 03:02 PM.

  • #2
    Thanks for the like, Sumyanna!

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    • #3
      Whether or not these fit a form, MHenry, they are successful in their own right. Little gems!

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      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        Thank you, grant!

        Katray's introduction to the tanka has also aroused my interest in an ancient and revered poetic form of which I was previously unaware. I will have to try my hand at that, as well.

      • AlexandratheLate
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        Yet another beauty. I'm loving this!!!

      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        Thank you, AG!

    • #4
      You have a talent for encapsulating the essence of a thing, in a manner I cannot.

      It inspires me to witness what is possible with the written word.

      Well done. I think I'll try it, for my own edification.

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      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        Hi, Dwayne, Thank you for your high praise.
        We all go after different butterflies, and the one's you catch are as beautiful, insightful, pithy, and mysterious as any.

    • #5
      I believe there is a similar version here already. It is more of a collaborative effort.

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      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        I am not a fan of collaborative efforts of more than two poets.

    • #6
      Well, this looks like fun! Looking forward to learning more about it - thanks MHenry - for the introduction (or reintroduction as the case may be). Seems to me that these fit the form quite well - and they are poignantly beautiful besides!

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      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        Thank you so much, RLW!

    • #7
      Fascinating, MHenry; read and reread.. I enjoy the theme, both sides of the coin yearning and real. I may have to try it.

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      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        Do! I am eager to see the results!

    • #8
      I REALLY like the premise of this type of prose MHenry. Thank you for the introduction and a firsthand interpretation!

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      • MHenry
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        Thank you, graydon!

    • #9
      Soft is Truth. You hit the nail on the head with that one. Really. And Hurt, a homerun for the romantics.

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      • MHenry
        MHenry commented
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        Thank you, O-b. I appreciate the support of a fine, romantically inclined poet such as yourself!

    • #10
      Fun!

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