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    you are my favorite poem
    composed by a zither
    notes playing delicately as a crane’s legs


    precisely balanced on the horizon
    by quivering light
    listening to pan-diatonic clusters


    unprepared modulation
    parallel harmony
    ​above the crashing waves


    arriving in perfect form
    slightly imperfect carriage
    long sought and oft hidden reverie


    I find written in every droplet
    playing with scents of sea-spray

    you

    my favorite poem

  • #2
    Rhythmic, sensual.

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      I greatly appreciate your comment DWAYNE. thank you for taking the time to read and to write!

  • #3
    A really captivating gem, Suz-zen. Music and the sea, woven skilfully. Zesta!

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      Thank you grant! Weaving the sea and the music to communicate what I was feeling/seeing seemed to be the vehicle that my mind and soul was searching... i was struggling a bit to get the words down. So thank you for the kind words!

  • #4
    I also loved the combination of the sea with music.

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      Thanks so much AlexandraLate for the encouraging words! I appreciate you reading my poetry and writing a positive comment.

  • #5
    Very beautiful Suz-zen. Melodic, soothing, gift.

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      Thank you RLW! I was uncertain if i needed a bit more editing. I keep trying out new things... stretching if you will. I may play with this one a little more. I sincerely value your appraisal.

  • #6
    Hi, Suz-zen, This is a hypnotic poem, lulling the reader into a deep sleep caressed by a soothing, comforting, and melodious sea spray.
    It's like running through a sprinkler in summer, but all you have to do is lie there, feel the soft spray, and listen to the music.

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      MH! Do you have ESP ? I had an image of running through the sprinklers too! Will save that for another poem!
      i was listening to Debussey as I wrote this one... always healing for me, hence the reference to Reverie and Mer...
      Hearkening back a few centuries for inspiration!

    • MHenry
      MHenry commented
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      Hahaha! Kids at heart! But I would much rather be at the ocean catching sea spray and listening to music!

  • #7
    Suz zen, I love this poem. Zither
    unprepared modulationpan-diatonic clusters
    parallel harmony
    ​above the crashing waves
    sea spray.
    Put me on a private beach.

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    • Suz-zen
      Suz-zen commented
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      Thank you BW! I like your comment so very much. A private beach is where i go in my dreams and also in real life when i need to calm my mind. thank you for reading my poem and for your generous praise!
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