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  • " The sadness will last forever"

    My first attempt with a sonnet:


    Holy questions still on your tender lips
    Drifting illness, driven by solitude
    Miseries written early in the scripts
    The saving grace, the colors you imbued

    Somber tones, graceful strokes, charcoal pied sky
    Sunlight becomes you, vibrantly it's shown.
    Strokes on the canvas, beauty to the eye
    You were passing through a world of your own

    Beauty turns to madness, love turned to woe.
    Insane musing for deaths invocation.
    Your body is wracked in tormented throe
    Sentenced now to eternal damnation.

    You are now evermore in death's repose
    Never to know the passions you arose.


  • #2
    Whoop, Whoop Graydon. Beautiful sonnet my friend!!!

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    • graydon archer
      graydon archer commented
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      Thanks Alexandra! I wrote it about Vincent van Gogh, one of my favorite artists....

    • Brainwreck
      Brainwreck commented
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      Very nice sonnet. I was looking at the Mona Lisa, just today.

  • #3
    One of my faves too! I mentioned him in my poem BLUE. :-)
    Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 04-28-2016, 05:21 AM.

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    • graydon archer
      graydon archer commented
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      Then I'm off to read it!

    • graydon archer
      graydon archer commented
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      Ummm.... I can't seem to find it. Where or what do I do to get to it?

  • #4
    Blue

    I know in places everywhere people are categorized by the color of their skin
    So very strange to me that all it’s all about the shade and hue
    Who made the rules of what colors lose and what colors win?
    Would it still be the same if we were all just different shades of blue?

    For my part I love the turquoise and aqua colors, the happy blues
    But I also enjoy the softer blue grays displayed in stormy weather
    There’s nothing like the ocean blues I’ve seen when on a cruise
    Then there’s the softer hues on clear blue skies that lift you like a feather

    What would the world be like for everyone, especially for you and me
    Would we pick on those that were navy blue, ultramarine or cobalt blue
    Even against Von Gogh would prejudice exist , blue as far as the eye could see
    It sure would be boring even if everything was colored in Egyptian blue

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    • graydon archer
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      I've often thought of color in the same way Alexandra, and what the distinguishable difference between humans would be if we were all truly color blind....

  • #5
    In reference to his STARRY NIGHT

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    • #6
      Bravissimo!!! Poet.This is beautiful. A level at which I have yet to achieve but aspire. The love, loss, and pain is heavily felt. You've crafted an excellent sonnet with death as the antagonist, like a tax collector, lingering. But in the end, it is love that holds us together.

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      • #7
        Ear! Ear! graydon! A triumphant first sonnet! Great subject matter, artfully composed, leaving vibrant impressions on the reader!
        Last edited by MHenry; 04-27-2016, 04:13 PM.

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        • #8
          Very moving, Graydon. I'm saddened that 'eternal damnation' is affirmed as Vincent's lot. Another reason why I fear and loathe that God.

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          • graydon archer
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            Grant, I thought perhaps I should have worded it slightly different, and posed it as a question: i.e. Sentenced now to eternal damnation?; leaving it then to individual interpretation... rather than a definitive

          • grant hayes
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            weighted/freighted now with the pain/taint of damnation ? Trying to find words that might make it less emphatic, Graydon.

        • #9
          Exemplary!

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          • #10
            What a beautiful tribute! one of my faves too! 👍🏼👍🏼

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            • #11
              Beautifully written Graydon! Thank you!

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              • #12
                MHenry , Odonko-ba, grant hayes, RhymeLovingWriter imrogue Thank you all so very much my fellow poets! I am humbled by your accolades.

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