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    Last edited by grant hayes; 12-20-2017, 08:09 PM.

  • #2
    Well, this sounds hopeless...if I'm understanding it at all. Am I even close?

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      OK, that helps (although I had to go look up apokatastasis). Well, now it's kind of cool. Still deep, but cool. Thanks for taking time to add more insight.

    • grant hayes
      grant hayes commented
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      I do have a really hopeless one that rhymes, but it's too much of a unrelieved downer to post. And I wouldn't want folk to think I actually thought that way; at least, not all the time.

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Just put a disclaimer and post away. I write some stuff that isn't necessarily what I think, at least, not all the time.

  • #3
    I hope I have summed up and not dumbed down, Samuel. I suspect I may have committed the latter: a pitfall into which my rhyme often trips.

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    • #4
      Nicely done Grant.....

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      • #5
        Why thank you, Poemahontas

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        • #6
          Interesting food for thought. I think I am seeing an edited version. No matter, grant, your work, rich with possibility and uniquely creative, shearing words into delicious souffles, compels reading and re-reading for ever expanding enjoyment.

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          • Odonko-ba
            Odonko-ba commented
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            Ditto! A dictionary, a cup of joe, and a grant hayes poem. And I'm ready for an intellectual journey.

          • grant hayes
            grant hayes commented
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            That is probably one of the nicest things anyone has said about my writings, Odonko-ba. The idea that someone on the other side of the world would enjoy reading my stuff with his dictionary and cuppa at hand just warms my heart. The internet is a blessed and blessing devil indeed.

        • #7
          I'm glad you find it so, MHenry. This is an ornately wrought little thing, high on concept, but not much in the way of heart. I offer it mainly to join in with the rhymers, like an elephant joining leaping gazelles.

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          • MHenry
            MHenry commented
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            Well, I would not call this poem a heap of elephant dung, in any event.

        • #8
          I like it; rhymes quite nicely! I do that too, fall into rhyme schemes mainly for the sake of rhyming..

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          • #9
            I wish I could fall into rhyme more easily, Katray, and make of it something better than the bagatelles to which I am prone. Thank you for reading.

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            • #10
              Well done as always, an intellectual delight. Hope is all we humans possess. Without, we're nothing more than base animals. Am I to far off?

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              • #11
                Not at all, Odonko-ba. It is a hopeful piece, seeing that there is a kind of transcendent turn even in apparent unbelief.

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                • #12
                  I actually find lots of hope in this poem -- at least a "glimmer of undespond" The contradiction of the self and the anti-self, as Yeats: "EGO DOMINUS TUUS" --especially in "even disdivine achieving Is a species of believing" Very cool!

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                  • #13
                    A man who can bring Yeats so cogently into the conversation I can only salute! Thank you for picking up on my undespond and disdivine, John. You geddit!

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