Wasted

[graydon archer]

You are most graciously welcome...

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Graydon. It did turn out a bit melancholy. I was trying to juggle a few elements (haiku, rhyme, and theme) which feels like a bit if a stretch for me. I'm grateful for your read and kindly comments.

[graydon archer]

KUDOS RLW! This is an awesome write full of thoughtful sadness. Well done!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Grant. I couldn't manage more than four this time - but I'm working on another themed haiku package and hope to increase. I like the challenge of maintaining the structure, connecting all into a theme, and of course - a little bit of rhyme thrown in for good measure!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Thank you Dwayne. Sometimes I wonder about tripping over the words. When I read it in my head it flows - but aloud - not always so much.

[DWAYNE]

A verbal workout!

[grant hayes]

Searingly good, Rhymist! I think the 'haiku rollout' form is being given a serious workout at the 'zone. This rings all the bells: a device-rich feast, suggestively but powerfully emotive. I salute, with a storm of huzzahs!

[RhymeLovingWriter]

savory sorrow
poured posthaste through sieve of lies
age-old patchwork split

petulant promise
spew-soft venom couched in sighs
purest truth denied

tentative heart-meld
pummeled merciless and dies
dust to dust returns

ratified concord
bled-dry steady compromise
love’s libation trashed