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    savory sorrow
    poured posthaste through sieve of lies
    age-old patchwork split

    petulant promise
    spew-soft venom couched in sighs
    purest truth denied

    tentative heart-meld
    pummeled merciless and dies
    dust to dust returns

    ratified concord
    bled-dry steady compromise
    love’s libation trashed
    Last edited by RhymeLovingWriter; 04-22-2016, 08:20 PM. Reason: Just learned how to add tags :)

  • #2
    Searingly good, Rhymist! I think the 'haiku rollout' form is being given a serious workout at the 'zone. This rings all the bells: a device-rich feast, suggestively but powerfully emotive. I salute, with a storm of huzzahs!

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      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Grant. I couldn't manage more than four this time - but I'm working on another themed haiku package and hope to increase. I like the challenge of maintaining the structure, connecting all into a theme, and of course - a little bit of rhyme thrown in for good measure!

  • #3
    A verbal workout!

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      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Dwayne. Sometimes I wonder about tripping over the words. When I read it in my head it flows - but aloud - not always so much.

  • #4
    KUDOS RLW! This is an awesome write full of thoughtful sadness. Well done!

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      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Graydon. It did turn out a bit melancholy. I was trying to juggle a few elements (haiku, rhyme, and theme) which feels like a bit if a stretch for me. I'm grateful for your read and kindly comments.

  • #5
    You are most graciously welcome...

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