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  • Jurisdiction

    blurred lines invited
    overreach in tender heart
    gavel fell rock hard

    feeling mistaken
    actions judged outward alone
    mercy gone AWOL

    small minds in crowd jeered
    gallery stood satisfied
    broken dreams remained

  • #2
    Well done RLW. A string of three engaging haiku advancing one story line. An injustice in the Halls of Justice done.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you MHenry. I'm working to learn the art of haiku. It's challenging but fun.

  • #3
    I like way the story is implied/hinted at in these three haiku. It gets better with each reading. Really nicely done. You should definitely keep up the haiku, Rhymist!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Grant. Appreciate the encouragement!

  • #4
    You nailed it....Justice is just a word, you can have as much of it as you can afford.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Brainwreck - hope I don't turn cynic all the way.

    • Brainwreck
      Brainwreck commented
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      hmp, justice gone AWOL. Got a little bit of a chip on my mind. I am new at metaphors so I don't always get
      the under message. Until recently I was black/white right/wrong type. I have had a 50 year writer's block.

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Well, I believe justice and mercy are two sides of the same coin. So when one is over-emphasized, that can be a problem. Passion is wonderful. Balance is also required.

  • #5
    Also, this wasn't specifically about legality... I see it playing out in relationship as well.

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    • grant hayes
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      I keep coming back to it and it keeps getting better. There are new glints with each turn. Superb work, Rhymist!

    • Brainwreck
      Brainwreck commented
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      RLW, I am glad I saw your comment here. I am too literal and under metaphor-ed
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