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  • Behind my Heart

    behind my heart
    lodged full in my throat
    thoughts, feelings, emotions and words...
    swirl and swell like torrents confined

    then bursting in tears and gasps and wonder
    into the waiting, loving arms of your patient embrace

    the joys, the sorrows, the fears and the hopes
    of change, effected and on the horizon,

    you take it in - you love me still
    your faithfulness, beauty and strength
    leave me in dumbstruck awe

  • #2
    For a dedicated Rhymist, that's some seriously good blank verse. I like how the lines begin short, increase in the middle, then subside. That matches the bursting of the 'torrents confined'.

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    • #3
      Thank you so much Grant. Once in awhile I step out of my box.

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      • grant hayes
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        btw, I really like the title, too. It simply compels further reading.

    • #4
      Occasionally, I actually rhyme too, RhymeLovingWriter. I should do it more often, but I lack the discipline. Or, rather, the discipline I have is of a different kind.

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      • #5
        RLW, I love it. I felt sad, then you changed directions and wrote the end on an...awesome high note............ Y'all are not in boxes. .......grasshopper.
        ...........
        Last edited by Brainwreck; 04-15-2016, 09:51 PM.

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        • RhymeLovingWriter
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          Thank you Brainwreck. That is indeed just the way events transpired.

      • #6
        I love it too.The diversity on this site is excellent. I have written some pieces without rhyme but none as effective as yours. Grant is right it is a different discipline
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        • RhymeLovingWriter
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          Thank you Parkinsonpoet! This being my first foray into any poetry forum, I feel doubly blessed. The muses smile in my direction and I anticipate great things ahead, learning new ways to strengthen my craft and making new friends along the way. win-win

      • #7
        Transpired lucky you. happy face

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        • #8
          Maybe writing is 90% transpiration and 10% inspiration

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          • grant hayes
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            I like that! True thing, Parkinsonspoet

        • #9
          This is a fine write, RhymeLovingWriter. I especially like the first four lines, which evoke a wealth of pent-up power and emotion!

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