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  • Zombie

    Right before our eyes
    For all to see
    If we seek truth -
    Foretold throughout millennia

    Gods crashing the gates
    Regurgitates dementia
    Sickness
    In the hearts and minds of
    Men

    Blinded
    By selfishness
    Fueled by gluttony
    The blind leads the blind
    On track to recklessness
    Guided by scent of sin

    Son of man repents aimlessly
    Discombobulate the populace
    Stagnant growth encapsulates
    Tears fulminates
    Promotes acedia
    Souls degenerate
    Hate emasculate
    Bodies gyrate
    Penetrates blindly

    Sentient beings

    Acting like damn
    Zombies!
    Odonko-ba
    Senior Member
    Last edited by Odonko-ba; 04-15-2016, 01:35 PM.

  • #2
    AMEN!! We have the ability to feel, perceive, and experience but we have become like a bunch of zombies diseased and mindless, slaves of the media,popularity -- oh I could go on -- see how your passion evokes passion in others. WONDERFUL!!

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    • Odonko-ba
      Odonko-ba
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      Odonko-ba commented
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      Exactly! A rat race encapsulated under a circus tent, with horse blinders on. Thank you for reading, and understanding.

  • #3
    From one passionate poet to another. I get passion especially about 'waking up'. Beautifully passionate!

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  • #4
    Nice, you nailed it. Too bad it can't be undone by mere mortals. They are just too greedy. And I understood.

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  • #5
    An incendiary, prophetic piece, Odonko-ba, suffused with exasperated indignation. You seem almost to explode in the last half of the fourth stanza with that stream of six word-pairs. Scorching!

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    • Odonko-ba
      Odonko-ba
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      Odonko-ba commented
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      Yes! it sort of just took off and the dance begun.
      I'm glad you enjoyed it. Coming next, Zombie 2.0
      Thanks again poet for your time.

  • #6
    The pull towards love of brother and sister seems not as strong as the tug towards self-annihilation until there is only one left. And then, I suppose, the one will have to commit suicide to appease its killing soul. Nice write, brother, Odonko-ba!

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    • Odonko-ba
      Odonko-ba
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      Odonko-ba commented
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      Your interpretations are always welcome. Like my own personal hype man. You make a person truly believe. Thank you my friend.

  • #7
    Well done as always!

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  • #8
    Everyone else has said it in a more coherent way than my thoughts but just wanted to say you fire my imagination

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