pin drop me

[Suz-zen]

Concentration
eludes
like whispers in
a crowded room
straining to hear
conversations
more captivating
than one
you just silenced
eavesdropping
pin dropping
Pin,
drop me
Pin,
drop me
Pin drop me
in
the alley
with llama’s
sweet honeymoon
strike up
the band
play a note
or two
close down
the joint
now just
me and you

[AlexandratheLate]

Lyrical Suz-zen. I especially like 'play a note or two
close down
the joint
now just
me and you'

kind of the oldie 'Bogie and Bacall'. Nicely done.

[Suz-zen]

aw, thank you ALT! I like the comparison of Bogie and Bacall!... believe it or not parts of this came to me in a dream a few nights ago with music... kind of sweet and lyrical. I tired to write it like the music i heard and the feelings I experienced in the dream... the line that kept playing and I awoke to and could not shake was ' pin, drop me...' almost like you could hear a pin drop... Or i wanted to be pin dropped into something???

[MHenry]

You write from the heart, Suz-zen. And you have found how to touch the reader's heart as well.
It seems like you often seek a personal connection with someone or something in your poetry.

[Suz-zen]

it is the only way I really find to write that is easy (?)
this personal connection was , as noted in comment to ALT ephemeral, if you will... this happens.
those pesky portals....thank MHenry if I touched your heart i am glad!!